redrafting from last night

Story/0BattleRoyale.fountain

@@ -199,7 +199,7 @@ CUT TO:
 Same void. **NOTORIOUSROOSTER** steps in. A **large, baggy dark-green cloak** so voluminous it obscures every detail of whatever body wears it—pooled hem on the floor, cavernous hood, oversized bell sleeves. From the hood, only a **short, sharp orange beak** (rooster-shape, downcurved tip) and a **sliver of red gizzard** at the throat. From each sleeve, the tip of a folded **wing** protrudes. Behind, a spray of **tail plumage** trails from a gap in the back of the cloak. No face. No body. No gender read. Just the bird-parts the fabric can't contain.
 
     **NotoriousRooster**
-    *notorious_rooster*
+    *notorious\_rooster*
 
 Raincloud is not present in the shadows this time. He is not visible.
 
@@ -243,7 +243,7 @@ CUT TO:
 Same void. **STARBOY** saunters in with full stature befitting the scene—teal-aqua layered hair, galaxy eyes, blue shearling-collar jacket, large star and small cloud hair clips. He winks.
 
     **Starboy**
-    *Starboy_Journeys   ·   Ruford / ijustdunnoanymore*
+    *Starboy\_Journeys   ·   Ruford / ijustdunnoanymore*
 
 Raincloud's shadow pacing continues.
 
@@ -259,7 +259,7 @@ CUT TO:
 Same void. **BEANIE** strides in. Chipper, pierced, beanie hat pulled just-so; confident grin, comfortable posture, the easy carry of someone who has never lost a social exchange. She, unlike the others, is completely photorealistic.
 
     **Beanie**
-    *beaniee__*
+    *beaniee\_\_*
 
 Raincloud's shadow pacing continues.
 
@@ -465,9 +465,9 @@ Side by side, a pair: **NONCRITICALMOTHER** — kind-eyed, silver-streaked-pink
 
 Pan right.
 
-**PIRATE_PROTOGEN** — protogen visor muzzle, LED trim, tricorn hat, navy coat with brass buttons, cutlass on the hip, hologram parrot flickering on his shoulder. Standing. Gesturing emphatically at the sand floor with both arms, mid-rant, but the crowd wash swallows whatever he's saying. He slaps a fist into his palm once for emphasis, points at somebody, sits down, crosses his arms, satisfied.
+**PIRATE\_PROTOGEN** — protogen visor muzzle, LED trim, tricorn hat, navy coat with brass buttons, cutlass on the hip, hologram parrot flickering on his shoulder. Standing. Gesturing emphatically at the sand floor with both arms, mid-rant, but the crowd wash swallows whatever he's saying. He slaps a fist into his palm once for emphasis, points at somebody, sits down, crosses his arms, satisfied.
 
-Beside him: **FOXY_FNAF5_UCN** — chibi fox-build, galaxy-print panels on ears / cheeks / top / shorts / tail-tip (indigo starfield with scattered stars), warm orange-gold base fur, eyepatch, hook hand, big fanged grin. Bouncing on the bench seat with both feet off the stone, pointing at the bubble and mouthing something urgent at Pirate_Protogen that the ambient swallows. Pirate_Protogen does not look over, still in his pout.
+Beside him: **FOXY\_FNAF5\_UCN** — chibi fox-build, galaxy-print panels on ears / cheeks / top / shorts / tail-tip (indigo starfield with scattered stars), warm orange-gold base fur, eyepatch, hook hand, big fanged grin. Bouncing on the bench seat with both feet off the stone, pointing at the bubble and mouthing something urgent at Pirate\_Protogen that the ambient swallows. Pirate\_Protogen does not look over, still in his pout.
 
 Pan up a tier.
 
@@ -546,7 +546,7 @@ Beanie is already coming — a knife in each hand, beanie straight, grin intact.
 
 She plants her back against Azure's and they take one synchronized step to the side, neither looking at the other, both knowing.
 
-Above them, a rush of feathers: Agate ascends off the plinth in one strong beat, banks hard, touches down beside Azure with a longsword she has pulled from one of the higher pedestals. Wings fold tight. The single mint eye flicks to Azure, to Beanie, and then out, scanning.
+Above them, a rush of feathers: Agate ascends off the plinth in one strong beat, banks hard, touches down beside Azure with a longsword in her mouth which she has pulled from one of the higher pedestals. Wings fold tight. The single mint eye flicks to Azure, to Beanie, and then out, scanning.
 
 AGATE
 (quiet)
@@ -575,12 +575,7 @@ Pact. Short and simple. No betrayals, no surprises. We stick together until it's
 AGATE
 Kindness where possible.
 
-STARBOY
-(instantly)
-Kindness where possible.
-
-AZURE
-Kindness where possible.
+Starboy and Azure both nod once, in solemn agreement. They look to Beanie.
 
 BEANIE
 (one beat slower, amused)